Critique #4: Miranda Y.

Annie Irwin, Teaching Assistant

I love that you’re describing a very sensitive subject matter in many ways. The way you treat the edge of the paper, and the way you treat the actual drawing of the face, both communicate a sort of decay of the body. The way the paper on the outside is falling apart, or breaking down in certain places helps communicate your subject matter in a more visually accessible way, that’s not just illustrating the body.

I also love that it’s starting to create it’s own environment outside of this drawing. So you get the feeling that the figure is trapped.  I think it would be really beneficial to look up the sculptor Tara Donovan.  She makes amazing environments out of regular materials. A way you could possibly expand on your drawing is to bring more of that environment into place. Even trying to make a model in a way to draw from, or to use that model to actually bring the drawing out of.

I also love in the lower right hand corner that you have a dark space for the viewer to enter the drawing.  It creates a really nice sense of depth that I think is necessary in your drawing. Like Alex was saying, it might be nice to bring out some more spaces in the face, do that there is a little more depth.  And that way, you could really continue to show the sense of depth and space in this image.

I think you did a fantastic job, and working with these environments, and working with these ways of treating regular materials could be a really good jumping off point to keep expanding your work.